Sunday, April 3, 2011

hello

I just recently bought a laptop from walmart because i needed a laptop that i has allot data planes. This loptop will help me do my homework because it has the latest windows which makes everything faster. my dad convinced me to get this laptop because he understood how much how i needed this new laptop so that i can accomplish my goals.

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  1. Hi, Batulo. You did a good job of explaining why you wanted to get a computer, but you missed one important question from the prompt: Was the brand of computer important to you and your dad? (Since we're considering advertising, we're interested in figuring out how much influence ads have on what you buy.)

    More attention needs to be given to proofreading before you post. Sloppy mistakes like not capitalizing the first letter in a sentence will bring your grade down a little.

    Grade: .7/1

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